The Journey is Our Future. A Poem #Prose4T
The Journey is Our Future
Feeling like forever
The distance travelled
A world over
The journey is long
Full of trials and tribulations
Forming and shaping me
Controlling who I become
The journey is hard
So many ifs and maybes
Where do we go from here?
What happens next?
The journey is questionable
Stepping into uncertainty
On the brink of what will be
Unable to control destiny
The journey is unforeseen
Time, it does so much
Our moment, is it here?
Quickly it has arrived
The journey is ahead
Standing at a crossroads
Which path will it follow?
Fate will lend a hand
The journey is our future
Victoria Welton 23rd February 2016
A wonderful poem, I agree with many of the other commentators. Sometimes we don’t have control over where our journey takes us or whether our choices will turn out to be the right ones or not. Great post #ThePrompt
I know exactly where you are coming from, Vic. All the very, very best with the journey. Hope the road is smooth and it leads you to where you want to be xxx
This feels incredibly resonant, Vic. What direction do you take? And how do you know it’s right? It’s difficult to relinquish control and have to leave things to fate. But the truth is with some things we have little choice but to do just that. A beautiful poem – wishing you all the very best, lovely lady xxx
This is wonderful and stepping outside your comfort zone paid off very well! I appreciate the journey immensely and I enjoyed the way you expressed it.
Thinking of you as you make this particular journey, and wishing you safe travel and success
As others have said, by not straining to rhyme poetry can be a lot more “honest” and emotional in its use of words. Your journey poem made me think upon my own life and how far I have travelled and what the future might bring 🙂
What a fabulous shot, a single feather in amongst all that green.
This gave me chills reading this, it is beautiful and everything else everyone above has already said! I absolutely love your poems and they way you express so much emotion in so few words xx
Such kind words, thank you so much Tracey x
This is such a poignant poem! I could relate so much to it. Isn’t is amazing how so few words can trigger a wealth of emotions? You have put together those few words so very skillfully l. This is soul food!
You are so right! Thank you so much 🙂 xx
This is so good, even without your trademark rhyming, so much emotion in so few words. The loss of control and uncertainty shines through.
Thank you so much Jo x
I also agree with the other comments, this is one of your very best, the sentiment, rhythm, everything. I absolutely love it. I’m always impressed with your ability to rhyme (as you know it’s not one of my strengths!), but there is something so free and honest about this poem. Thank you so much for sharing with #ThePrompt x
What a wonderful compliment. Thank you so much Sara – I will certainly try more like this. Thank you for hosting x
Beautiful poem and I agree with the other comments that it’s one of your best – it’s so simply expressed but so powerful and poignant. There’s such a sense of longing in it, and each step on the journey feels so tangible. Lack of rhyme can be liberating in many ways – it opens up so many words that can help you express what you want without being bound by the constraint of trying to make the rhyme. I love the final line and the statement that “the journey is our future” – I hope that it will bring you all you wish for.
Thank you so much Louise. Such wise words – and you are so very right. I think I need to try this more often 🙂 xx
Beautiful, Victoria. Despite the fact that it doesn’t rhyme, it’s one of your best yet. There’s so much honesty and emotion here. I can feel your anxiety, your excitement, your fear about this journey. I’ve read several of your pieces for a long time now, and I have to say this evokes the most emotion. Perhaps the fact that you weren’t constricted to a rhyme scheme made it more so? There’s still a cadence to your words that makes the poem “move” (forgive me if that doesn’t make sense…). There’s still a rhythm to it…and it’s fabulous. Thanks so much for sharing this with us, Victoria and for hosting us on this week’s #prose4t!
What an amazing compliment, thank you so much Maria. With all this feedback I think I need to write more poetry like this! Thank you for linking Maria – I look forward to reading yours xx
As someone who is not a huge fan of rhyming poetry, I think this is one of the best poems you’ve ever written. I think you can fit much more emotion into poetry if you aren’t focused on making it rhyme. It takes on a natural rhythm of it’s own. xx
What lovely words, thank you so much Emma xx
Beautiful writing, wishing you much luck xxx
Thank you 🙂 x
As Louise said, this is so poignant. a beautiful piece. Wishing you lots of luck. xxx
Thank you so much Maddy xx
Very nice. It is a journey, isn’t it?
Totally 🙂
Very poignant, lovely
Thank you Louise x